I'm going to talk about violence, because I'm very worried with this. Today in Fantástico show I saw an interview about a mother who lose her daughter. That girl was eight years old, after the robbery on their house the robbers shooted and one shoot caused her daughter's death.
When I saw the interview I stayed shocked and I started to think if this happened in my family, we just think when things like that happen with our family but today were different. It is very sad to see a mother cry because her chield was kield or was attack by someone.
I love going out with my friends I like going to the Avenue and drink chimarrão and mainly go out at night, but now with all this violence in Brazil I'm very apprehensive and I'm affraid because I don't know if I will come back home. My mother always says that I need to be careful and considerate and I always do that, but I don't know if this is enough.
When I see the news in the television I can't belive that all this is truth. Unfortunatly the violence is around the world and we can't do anything. But we can't lost the hope, I know that this is difficult, everything it is a mess in our country but if we lost the hope Brazil is lost and we too, it is very important to have faith, well this is what I'm trying to do.
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ResponderExcluirHi! Samantha! You are sure. We live with afraid. I call to my mother everyday before I arrive in the bus stop. I can't trust anyone. This is awful.
ResponderExcluirGood text.
Hii Sammy! You're right, the violence is getting worse and worse...
ResponderExcluirBut I don't think we have to stop doing what we like! If you like to go out at night, I think you should keep doing it but, of course, taking care about yourself and don't exposing you to the riskiness.
I'll tell you about some mistakes on your text ;)
I think it would be better "worried about this" instead of "worried with this" but I don't know if it's really wrong.
"A mother who lose" you have to put in the past "who lost".
"That girl" I don't know if is wrong but I think it sounds better saying "the girl".
"Today were different" you must say "today was different"
"chield" -> "child"
"Kield" -> "killed"
"was attack" you must put both verbs in the past "was attacked".
"belive" -> "believe"
"everything it is a mess" you don't have to put that "it" because the subject is "everything" so you just have to put "everything is a mess".
That's it Sammy! If you have some doubt you can ask me ;) I'll help you with pleasure! And I'm sorry if I said something wrong about your mistakes...
Kisses!!